Talk:Absolute Prison (Part 1)/@comment-4139585-20120412002057

Overall I give this a 9.5/10

I have three things to say:


 * Great ideas


 * When you say (beat) does that mean a pause


 * There are a few mistakes, but none that affect the actual events of the episode (i only found two: when ben had just found the ingrediants you say "I guessing" instead of "I'm guessing", and earlier when you say, "...shooting a huge blast of mana right at him. He flied backwards and smashes... " you switch tense from present to past and it was kinda confusing

other than that it was good

i'm looking forward to part 2!