Talk:I am iron man/@comment-5229684-20131006120559

--Please don't take this as harsh criticisim D8--

This is a prime example of an ben10ian writing a random episode with not much plot. Although this title does pertain to the character who arrives into the scene like a peacock falling from the sky--illogical as this is--in zero gravity, I know my sentence doesn't make sense. Sorry.

But you may want to improve on your basic writing, as in--> making episodes, chapters, and what not. Nothing really happened juszt the characters talking as if it JUST happenedd. I know I'm somewhat guilty of using illogical things in one fanfiction of mine, but, this is your training field. So keep on writing! :)