User blog:Furquim/Help?

Hi. Seven months ago I tried to create a fanfiction here, called Zero: Lost World. After this, I had some personal issues, and stopped the fanfiction and became inactive. Now, I wanted to start this fanfiction, but I'm insecure, and I want to know what you guys think about the plot (that has sightly changed):

"Long time ago, the universe experienced a period called "Dark Times". A era of many interplanetary and intergalactic wars. One empire, Abyssus, has stood out among many, by it's cruelty and constantly growth in military force. Their emperor, Abyss, managed to took ownership of an ancient mass destruction weapon, capable of destroy entire galaxies in a blink of an eye. Forcing an alliance by many planets in order to stop Abyss. But he was to powerfull, forcing a being simply called "E." to seal Abyss in a Black Hole called "Ground Zero". The seal can only be oppened by using an ancient artifact called "Infinity Clock", that was divided into 10 pieces and hide in bizarre and dangerous places.

Today, a group called "Highlanders" is hunting the pieces of the clock, and threatening the universe once more. Aware of an eminent catastrophy, Azmuth creates a new Omnitrix, that allows the user to transform into ancient species, called "Lost Species", so powerfull that only a being with blank DNA could withsain. To hold the power of the Omnitrix, Azmuth creates Zero, a being with blank DNA, that, after a discussion, runs away from Galvan and joins David - a Bounty Hunter - and Catherine - an demigod - to hunt the Highlanders, and stop the doomsday."

So, if you can give me your opinion, please leave a comment bellow.

Sorry for my english, I'm Brazilian, and I'm very tired right now. And remember, the story is in pre-production state, so it's very weird and very bad.

Thanks.