Thread:Brandon 10/@comment-31323108-20170926003508/@comment-3441048-20170929200811

First off, welcome to the wiki! It's nice to see new faces around here.

Second off, sorry for the wait. I haven't been on the wiki in a while.

And third off, I'm super flattered that you wanted my opinion on your series.

Now, for your series, I think the main plot/concept could use some work. It does seem kinda basic and similar to the Original Series with the biggest change being that Gwen also has an Omnitrix. The main thing you have to ask is what makes your series different from the others, as in what's the main thing about your series.

Since it's based on the Original Series, it does seem enclosed within that Universe but, fortunately, that universe is pretty big and there's plenty of things in it to work with. It's like a toy box really, you've got stuff from OS to OV, heck even the Reboot if you want to go that far. Just put your own spin on them: either play them out differently or play them straight but just use them differently. The difference being something like this: Ben fights bad guys but has to focus on school instead of summer vacation (played straight, just used differently). Vilgax already has an army but wants to destroy the Omnitrix because it's the only thing in his way (played differently). Those were just examples, by the way, feel free to do whatever you want with those characters. And this is a fan fiction, you don't even have to limit yourself. Creating new characters, places, things and ideas for all of that is pretty much what we do here.

Also maybe focus more on the title. Why is called Split 10? Maybe the two trixes that they have are actually one trix and because of the attack on Azmuth and Albedo, they were forced to split them up so that Vilgax wouldn't find it. Maybe the concept of the show could be Ben and Gwen's relationship, since they don't like each other so much in the beginning- in order to use their trixes to their fullest, they have to work together, to join the trixes and form them as one force. That's just my interpretation, which you can totally use, but the point is that kind of thinking is what you need when coming up with an original concept.

And it's great to plan ahead but if you have ideas, definitely use them. I like the idea of Gwen's Anodite powers giving her more abilities with her Omnitrix but it sounds like they're kids now and waiting until she becomes a teenager in order for that to happen does sound like a stretch to me. Unless something in the present happens and it keeps building up to that moment, it would probably be better to move it to now rather than the future. Ben's character change when he gets into a fight is also an interesting concept which exists in the now (hopefully) and, from experience, I know it's better to focus on the two characters that have an Omnitrix rather than just the main dude.

I think that's all the advice that I've got. Sorry for the long post, I get very descriptive sometimes. Honestly, anything has the potential to become a good concept. There's never really an original idea but your telling of that idea is what makes it unique and interesting to watch- or in this case, read. Best of luck with your series, if you need any more help, feel free to message me or check out the new user writing guides here.