Talk:Renegades/@comment-4050367-20160708194652

So here is my review of the episode and some comments of the series so far:

PROS: 

- Caesar's Transformation

The opening scene was very good, and I like the drama that has developed with the Caesar becoming a slave to Plasma again.

- Oracle and Oblivion

These two characters are highlights of the recent episodes in my opinion. They are the comic relief and they make the episodes better.

- The Ending

I like the sense that Lisa will be suffering something far worse than death, which you seem to imply in the final words of the episode.

CONS:

- The Ending

I have to admit, I'm kinda sad that the deaths in Precarious were negated. Because of that,  I'm skeptical of the conclusion of this episode in terms of what happened Caesar.

- The Villain Problem

Plasma, Plasma, Plasma... is so behind the scenes that he's not the villain I saw in Virulent and in the first few episodes I read. I mean all the new radioactive villains are cool I guess, but I mean Plasma is the big bad of the season so... I wanna know more about him. I want to anticipate and get excited whenever he shows up.

So now that I'm caught up, I'm just gonna comment on something I've noticed: they're so short. So far, the entire season up to this point as of today is 104,597 bytes. Now as of to date, my largest published work is 95,605 bytes, and that's half of an episode. Now, obviously I have a lot of pictures and .ogg files for music, and templates, and obviously I understand that people write different lengths for episodes, and I'm just on the longer side.

That's not a bad thing, and you don't have to write that long of stuff. I just feel like things happen so fast that every scene is a plot scene, with sprinkles of character exploration there and there. In the future, I would like to see episodes with a bit more in them so that while they don't need to be plot related, just give us a sense of how Mack is feeling, or something. Give us Character Scenes in addition to great Plot Scenes. I mean this is a total opinionated suggestion and you do not have to listen to me by any means, but it's something I'd look into.

I'm glad Mack 10 is back in business, Rob. Keep up the good work.