Talk:Clash of the Titans: Part 1/@comment-2133523-20130321034119

Your grammar is horrifically broken, i fixed it, somewhat...

a few tips to writing.

1) new paragraph when someone new starts speaking

2) for every punctuation mark, like a full stop or a comma, put a space after it.

3) An interesting premise, but executed poorly, you need to properly describe the battles, what should have made up a few pages of story, you managed to condense down into a single paragraph, and it does not make good reading. instead of saying "They slayed the Hydra." describe the battle, what Aliens did Ben use to defeat it, how what was their strategy to beat it.

Again, this is an interesting premise, Ben and his companions fighting ancient mythological creatures, could make for some good fights, maybe say that, in order to combat the Medusa's ability to turn anything she looks at into stone, have Kevin face her alone, whilst already made of stone. maybe have Way-Big fight the Colossus, Ripjaws vs the Kraken, have all of the boys ensnared by the songs of the Psirens, and Gwen having to save them. Have Rath fighting as a Gladiator (Which i can only imagine would be hilarious "LET ME TELL YOU SOMETHING CROUD THAT LOOKS ENTERTAINED! ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED!?!?!?")

my point is, to make this interesting, have a look at the weaknesses of all of the mythological monsters, and then see who in the team can exploit those weaknesses. E.G. when in the minataurs maze, Ben transforms into Brainstorm who makes a mental map of the entire maze, so they can't get lost.