Talk:Re:Start/@comment-1893650-20171013170217

[Atomix]: “HORA-HORA-HORA-HORA-HO-” die bictch

welp time for a pretty long review

this is going to come off as pretty harsh but im being honest so bear with me on this

the good:

the transformation sequence comics are really great and a pretty interesting way to show off new alien designs and stuff

the ai transforming ben is a great idea but i feel like atomix way big or whampire can just solve everything so the system might be kinda flawed rip.

like always the writing itself is great (the grammar and formatting stuff)

nice post episode memes

the bad:

(theres kind of a lot here sorry)

>rook gets nuked but survives in critical condition NICE

>tfw you accidentally nuke undertown critically injuring your partner causing major property damage and killing off at least 100 aliens including children but its ok cause you get a new omnitrix with your deus ex machina removed and you get to go on a wacky race with your friends for a shitty macguffin :ok_hand:

was this all an excuse to kill off rook wtf

like this being shrugged off by everyone besides him getting ptsd for like five seconds then just doing the same old shit (which didnt even deal with the fact that he probably killed a ton of people and his partner) and that scene with azmuth (which started off good but then like... didnt actually mean anything besides the ptsd thing) and getting ptsd from transforming is pretty bad writing imo, like honestly if you're gonna do something like this at least try to address this a bit more besides those two scenes cause thats a really big thing

also i honestly think this is some really weak writing from you to get rid of the shit you dont like for instance:


 * azmuth giving ben yet another omnitrix for no real reason besides removing alien x who can solve anything but keeping clockwork for instance doesnt really make sense. like couldnt he just delete alien x or upgrade bens omnitrix with the ai shit instead of making a new one


 * rook getting literally killed off in a pretty horrifying way and no one giving half a shit because you dont like his character is just eh

also kind of off topic but theres legit no reason at this point for albedo to look like ben, just let him be a galvan dude

overall idk really, the writing itself is great and all besides the stuff ive listed that annoyed me but im not really sure if i like this concept in general yet

ill be reading the next episodes, for now imma give this 6/10 though