Thread:Cokedragon/@comment-4897796-20130419183238/@comment-4848837-20130423200146


 * 1) The Ultimate Alien era in the Alien Universe era was referred to as the Unleashed era (so the title should be Ben 10 Unleashed: Time Rules).
 * 2) In this universe, all of the Halloween Trio aliens are referred to by their original names--that is, Benmummy, Benvicktor, and Benwolf (I believe you only used Benmummy, but still).
 * 3) Please don't have links lie in the story.
 * 4) "PAradox, you're serious acting weird lately" --> "Paradox, you've seriously been acting weird lately."
 * 5) It doesn't sound like Ben to say "Back to Earth. And remmember [should be "remember"] that not a single moment has passed outside Chronia." It would make more sense if Ben was still Streak as he said that, and continued to be Streak even up until the final line.
 * 6) The final piece of 'dialogue': "What's that?! GWWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEN!!!!!" should be something different. Since Ben is still Streak (see the change above), he should instead open a portal to Earth, head off, say to Gwen "Good luck getting home!" as he runs into the portal and closes it. Gwen then yells "BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEN!"
 * 7) The technical final line: "The END!" should be "[END OF SPECIAL]"
 * 8) Because Clockwork was re-unlocked by Ben 10K in Ben 10K Returns (canon ep) and that Chronia is less time-exempt in the Alien Universe timeline, this can't be fanon to Alien Universe, only events that occurred in an alternate timeline. Sorry :/