Talk:Chapter 1: The Exchange/@comment-1824169-20160926202617

What happened.

I legit have no idea what just happened and I just read this episode.

The biggest issue here is that the narrative isn't providing a clear picture of what's going on. It's like you're trying to describe things more artistically or something, but you forgot what you're actually trying to describe. In addition, a lot of the sentence structure is very clunky, making this a bit grating to read.

As for the actual plot, I guess it's fine as a prolougue. I just wish I could tell what was going on better.